See Comparative Response to 3 articles: pp. 72-4 (Typical Year 12 SAC)
Paragraph 1: Seashells
Be clear about the author’s argument/persuasive strategies: Who is she? What is her perspective? What is her evidence? What does she prove with the evidence?
“Construction of argument” strategies:
Ms Achton uses her 30-year professional experience as an educator to highlight the importance of principles such as care and concern for others.
The author relies on her professional experience as a teacher to reinforce her views that it is important to educate the children about the world in which they live.
String of evidence/examples: comparisons (Argument)
Critical to the development of her argument are references to well-known role models such as John Lennon and Desmond Tutu. Both these renowned people highlight the need to do good works in the world. These examples — that people can make a difference through small-scale initiatives — function as a series of comparisons/analogies.
The teacher also gives personal stories about her involvement with her students in the classroom. She refers to the picture book, All the Cats in the World, to depict the very poignant and heartening story of the “cat woman”. (quotes)
Key argument/key points:
- Ms Achton recommends that we act responsibly towards others and towards our world because there are (moral and practical) consequences of our actions.
- Even our smallest actions can make a considerable impact.
- As an educator, her most important task is to encourage children to be resilient, independent, self-reliant and respectful. They must have the strength and courage to care.
The author’s key reasoning and persuasive techniques;
- Real-life experience as an educator in the classroom
- Values/appeals/priorities: She focuses on values/principles such as duty of care; moral responsibilities to others and to the world around us)
- She relies on (moral) comments from well-known world leaders and their purpose (John Lennon and Archbishop Tutu)
- She uses real-life examples to support these comments: the picture book (the cat lady; withstands criticism; strength of her convictions;) and the real-life example: shows how we can use social media to advantage and to make a very big difference; little things are significant in the lives of many) Also the comment from the young girl.
- Ms Acthon refers to inspirational role models; John Lennon’s quotes: Archbishop Tutu
- intertextual reference to All the Cats in the World – to encourage the children to realise that they can make a difference; moral is that individuals should not heed be dissuaded by the criticism and taunting of others
- statistics and real-life examples /anecdotal evidence from the retired principal about her work in India
- purpose: to show the effectiveness of small steps; to empower all individuals to care about others
Metalanguage: upstanding and moralistic tone; anecdotes; appeals to role models and care and concern
Simple paragraph plan:
Idea: (tone) Ms Achton believes that real change often occurs because of people’s small steps.
Argument: Underpinning her views, are a series of real-life examples and key quotes that place an emphasis on care and respect for others.
Quote: “students must be challenged, inspired and empowered to know that they can help to make the world a better and brighter place” (tripling/ alliteration)
Quote: to “attain success” one must “persevere” / quotes – do a little bit of good: appeal to notions of care and concern for planet and people
Quote: (depiction of a woman who was different but who cared); emotive language; “cat woman – “while you can’t save every cat”.. you can “make a difference in the lives of a few”; inspire others to get involved. (specific audience; students , and those, who may have been the target of unwelcome abuse ; are certainly likely to find the story of the cat woman very inspiring.)
See : putting together: a sample paragraph
Evaluate the examples and the comparisons – set up the comparison.
Please refer to Exercise 29, pp 72-73 “Making a difference”, by Jane Achton