Exercise 24, Swings and Playgrounds, p. 60
Topic Sentence: It is imperative that the council officers ensure that children with a disability have the same opportunities in the playgrounds as able-bodied children. This includes accessible swings. Evidence (Expert opinion): David Craig said the council had a responsibility to provide access to facilities regardless of their budget cost. “They really have a responsibility to make sure equipment and facilities are accessible to everyone.” Mr Craig said. (Explanation) If the children do not have equal access then they become excluded and separated from mainstream society. (Refer to Scott’s story.) Sadly this happens in the playground; it is perpetuated in all walks of life. The playground becomes a model of separation and exclusion typically suffered by the disabled. (Positioning statement: encourage readers to feel sympathy for the disabled and outrage towards the council.)
It is a waste of the council’s funds
Topic Sentence: The Council must not build swings for the disabled at all playgrounds because it would be an unwise. inefficient use of taxpayer’s money. The swings may not be well patronised, and would be too expensive. It is preferable to choose a few playgrounds in an entire suburb and have a focus on facilities for people with a disability.. It is also important that broad section of the community has equal access to taxpayer’s money. (What appeals is she making and what are her reasons and logic?) (Evidence) Whitehorse city development general manager Julie Reid said there were no plans to install a wheelchair-accessible swing in playgrounds in the Whitehorse municipality, which would cost about $5,000. She justifies her decision by defending the council’s “holistic approach” and the fact that they upgrade playgrounds according to the needs of the “whole community and the availability of funds.