1. References to tone and metalanguage/techniques.
Whilst it is important that you do not overuse tone, smart references can enhance your analysis.
Think about using tone words adverbially, and weave them into your sentence and hence, into your discussion.
- Frankly (tone), the author relates his personal experience as a parent to reinforce the dangers of “over-parenting”.
- Defensively, the author rationalises the benefits of the scheme and encourages fair-minded members of the public to recognise the lack of alternatives.
- Similarly, Mr Spring poignantly defends the plight of students but argues from his own personal perspective as a country student.
- Mr Appleby (categorically, phlegmatically, stridently, unequivocally) defends the government’s plan to deregulate university fee
- Sensibly, (prosaically, phlegmatically) Mr Louv contends that children in westernised countries are suffering from a lack of connection with nature.
- In his excerpt, “Straight and narrow not so hallowed”, Mic Looby categorically defends the rights of same sex people to get married. Specifically, he depicts the anti-gay marriage campaigner as a spoilt and jealous
- Assuredly and candidly, Ms Springs justifies the decision to ban the drug on the grounds that …
- Reproachfully, the author discredits those who purport to cherish nature’s beauty, whilst dismissing natural energy projects such as wind-farms. Using selective quotes to mock their views ….
- Dr Shanahan abruptly concludes with a reference to law and order …
As an adjective
- Adopting an indignant (or aggrieved) tone (see ‘tone descriptors’), Ms Waring condemns Kyle Sandiland’s comments as inappropriate and discriminatory.
- In a peremptory (dogmatic) tone, Dr Gregg highlights many parallels between Ebola and adolescent binge drinking
- Dismayed, the author outlines the scheme’s failures.
- Adopting a high-minded tone, the author outlines the shameful double standards of those who push for “heavy-lifting” practice.
See using analytical terminology more effectively: based on a student’s work.
Likewise, techniques can also be used skilfully. They don’t have to be heavy-handed.
- Comparatively, the statistics point to a decrease in living standards from 1970 to 2000. (use of comparisons)
- Shamefully, the opposition has not aired their views on the proposal, and therefore lacks credibility. (purpose to shame; moral appeal)
Fair-minded members of the public are likely to be concerned at the suggestion of perceived disadvantage on behalf of students. (appeal to fairness)
And try not to be too heavy-handed with the constant phrase, “this positions readers to ….”
Purpose, purpose, purpose ….
2. Think about a common thread running through the paragraph.
Group together, a cluster of related ideas and strategies. Work from the big picture to the particular details. Signpost your paragraph.